left to shatter - zhooniyaawigamigoon

zhooniyaawigamigoon

May. 20th, 2004 at 11:10 AM

~~i'm new to html, so i haven't figured out why the formatting of this is so wonky in that the title is a mile from the actual poem. but, it is being kept behind an lj-cut tag.~~

aboriginal representative and ontario ministry of finance representative conduct dialogue on economics
oh	Hello.	oh boy,
fuck	Hello,	it’s another one
it’s her	I’d like to	be so brown
she’s looking	to make a withdrawal	from what Reserve
she’s looking at me	from my chequing account.	and cheap clothes
why couldn’t	Your number?	of kids
not mean anything	I forgot.	she has
the problem	But, I have my debit card―	for heaven’s sake,
she’s looking	there.	never
at me	One moment―	can you trust
with such hostility	how much out of your account?	is for beer
for what it’s worth	I’ll take $100 and I need	drugs?
I must be crazy	to deposit a cheque.	to make it through the week
is there lint	In your chequing account?	from unemployment
on my shirt?	I’ll take	like all the others
crap or	$200 for	such nice land
what	now	is going to waste
oh	and deposit the rest in	the hands of drunks
fuck her	regular chequing	the need for police
I just want my money	That all?	these people
want	S’everything.	we can’t
escape	Okay, then.	be accountable
when this is over	Thanks.	for nothing

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counterword wrote:

May. 20th, 2004 08:03 pm (UTC)

I usually don't like nonstandard poetic styles but that was clever and I liked it... a lot!

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animikwaan wrote:

May. 20th, 2004 08:41 pm (UTC)

thank you!

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(Anonymous) wrote:

May. 20th, 2004 08:56 pm (UTC)

yes

i absolutely love this.

~a

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animikwaan wrote:

May. 20th, 2004 11:56 pm (UTC)

Re: yes

thanks, pretty lady.

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aipaloovik wrote:

May. 20th, 2004 11:40 pm (UTC)

it took a moment, but i finally got to readin' it proper-like

i think its really good

eez good'a, jah!

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animikwaan wrote:

May. 21st, 2004 12:00 am (UTC)

yeah, i think it's easier to see when it's on paper. and it's not quite perfect, but, believe me, i worked on it for months (a little bit here, a little bit there) until i was happy with its final form. the intent is visible, though. but i traded perfection for the fact that i think that the conversations that happen in the head are fragmented, and that the actual one takes grammatical precedence over the others.

thanks!

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